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Beasts of burden
Creatures of habit
Guzzle blackness in the light
Fluorescent, burning
Dependent on another creature
Greedy, hungry
We sustain her as she grows
And she sustains us as we grow
But what when sustenance is lost
Do we do?
Can we fight our urges
To become fat on wealth?
Or will we fall
Into a malnourished slumber
When she has devoured our mother
That we so willingly gave?
Creatures of habit
Guzzle blackness in the light
Fluorescent, burning
Dependent on another creature
Greedy, hungry
We sustain her as she grows
And she sustains us as we grow
But what when sustenance is lost
Do we do?
Can we fight our urges
To become fat on wealth?
Or will we fall
Into a malnourished slumber
When she has devoured our mother
That we so willingly gave?
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watched Manufactured Landscapes today, a documentary of the photography of Ed Burtynsky.
sparked this.
i dunno, i write things like this sometimes. no reason, just because.
sparked this.
i dunno, i write things like this sometimes. no reason, just because.
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